Angel of Death

This was Wow!! You did a great job with the emotions of the MC, you're an awesome writer. This deserves a star!!!

Thanks Jab, you helped me out a lot.

This is very sad but I think you are very brave, a lot of girls go through the same thing would keep it a secret until it was too late...this ...

OMG!! This was so sad, but I want to know what happened next, please say that that creep got put in jail for the rest of his life. Oh...this... Sorry ...

I really love this, you are very artistic. I liked how you chose to style this poem this was beautiful, good job!!

Oh my gosh this is so beautiful and sad you made me cry. Great job!!

I liked this. I think maybe you should add more though. Keep writing and good luck!!

This was really good.

This was so beautiful, I love the way you separated the paragraphs with sentences and how it ended...It's life. True brilliance!!!

You should put Raven's thoughts in italics and separate them from the paragraphs. I like how you don't just rush into things...keep writing.

I am half way through this. Lovely improvements, can't wait to read more. :D

Thanks KJ I appreciate the critique...I'll surely fix this.

Thanks Sokool. I was thinking about the Salem witch trials when I was writing this which I think happened to Massachusetts...I'm taking U.S. and all the location details are a ...

I really loved this, it was just so beautiful. I felt like I was in a fairytale...I especially liked the third one.

This was beautiful and with a little more work it could be breathtaking. Please finish this has potential.